Edit: Ah! I did see your review, and thank you for the feedback. I can say that yes, the Ravy character does have flaws - he is, after all, struggling for independence and self-empowerment after being sheltered for some time. The question is if he’s handling this struggle in the most productive or thoughtful of ways.😉
No doubt his impulsivity and inexperience will lead to conflict. The interesting thing, for me at least, is how he deals with the consequences.
Also a suggestion, but it's up to you, you might want to take it easy with the info dump on the lore since it would confuse some readers. Again it's up to you.
Yup, there’s definitely an art to efficiently communicating world details in stories like this: Too much and it gets bogged down and is potentially confusing. Too little and the world lacks depth and is even more confusing.
Trying to find that middle line is always the challenge, and I don’t pretend to always get it right. I’m certain we’ll veer back and forth and try to make refinements throughout development.
I love the soundtrack and the story so far. Already, we have hints at three big plots and I find that exciting! I'm invested. Even the art of Ravy and Kavir just looking at the city was gorgeous. Straight up took me to my own memories of gray skies and white winter days.
I really like that Ravy and Kavir are in an established relationship (or that's what it seems like to me at least) at the start of the game and somewhat intimate at that, a nice change of pace from other vns.
We considered nonlinear routes, but determined the planned story was too long and too complex. It could as much as triple development time. We know this will disappoint some players, but hope the strength of the story will speak for itself!
What a strong and original concept! :D I absolutely adore the direction of the story, love the well constructed characters, and have become enamoured by the interesting universe~ ^^_
Amazing work. A true masterpiece in the making UwU
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It's okay, I guess
Oh? Did something in particular bother you?
Edit: Ah! I did see your review, and thank you for the feedback. I can say that yes, the Ravy character does have flaws - he is, after all, struggling for independence and self-empowerment after being sheltered for some time. The question is if he’s handling this struggle in the most productive or thoughtful of ways.😉
No doubt his impulsivity and inexperience will lead to conflict. The interesting thing, for me at least, is how he deals with the consequences.
I hope you continue reading to see how he grows!
Also a suggestion, but it's up to you, you might want to take it easy with the info dump on the lore since it would confuse some readers. Again it's up to you.
Yup, there’s definitely an art to efficiently communicating world details in stories like this: Too much and it gets bogged down and is potentially confusing. Too little and the world lacks depth and is even more confusing.
Trying to find that middle line is always the challenge, and I don’t pretend to always get it right. I’m certain we’ll veer back and forth and try to make refinements throughout development.
I love the soundtrack and the story so far. Already, we have hints at three big plots and I find that exciting! I'm invested. Even the art of Ravy and Kavir just looking at the city was gorgeous. Straight up took me to my own memories of gray skies and white winter days.
I love this! <3
I really like that Ravy and Kavir are in an established relationship (or that's what it seems like to me at least) at the start of the game and somewhat intimate at that, a nice change of pace from other vns.
Really interesting world! Hope we get to find out what some of the places are
The immediate world and geography will definitely be expanded on in the story, through the LOOM database, and in some podcasts we have planned.
bump
Waiting android ver :I
It’s done! (Finally, hehe.)
Will this remain linear, or will it have choices in later builds?
It will remain linear.
We considered nonlinear routes, but determined the planned story was too long and too complex. It could as much as triple development time. We know this will disappoint some players, but hope the strength of the story will speak for itself!
Any chance you plan to make an android version?
Yes, one is in the works. We’ll make a dev post once it’s ready!
Aaaand it’s ready!
What a strong and original concept! :D I absolutely adore the direction of the story, love the well constructed characters, and have become enamoured by the interesting universe~ ^^_
Amazing work. A true masterpiece in the making UwU
Thank you!
Can you add the windows and mac tags to the downloads so people using the itch.io app can download.
Fixed! Thanks for catching that oversight.
please add "bara" to tags 🤩
I wait for Android release :)
Coming soon!
And ready!
Woo! great stuff! I love Kavir!!!
Question, is the MC a human?
He is. For now.
"For now"?... That's literally make or break info for a lot of people.
“For now” meaning changes will occur in the story, hints of which are embedded in the title screen. But in short: Yes, the MC is human.